I don't have any achievement or Olympic poems, but wanted to post something so that you know I am not dead!
Slipping Full-length Down My Life
Your head is just breaths away.
I wait for you, for formality -
spent too much on sentiment.
I want to use your life, write down your spine.
It’s summer now. The sun
speaks in long shadows and
all the flowers are white.
You read me by scars.
Do you remember writing them?
I watch the end of the sun catch your ringless finger
and could kiss you.
I want to put myself in your thoughts.
One last time.
The Writers!
At Gardoussel retreat August 2008
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Hi Abi.
Have only just noticed - two weeks after your posting - that this poem had gone up. You know by now of course that I have already seen this poem of yours via Bill's course (online exeter uni 'poetry clinic' for anyoner else who's interested - it's brilliant) but although I love it both ways, you know, I actually prefer it in the first person ie this version. What made you decide to change to third person? For me this is more powerful. I love 'just breaths away' and 'you read me by scars' especially. I can't wait to read this in you collection when it comes out! sharonx
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